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Many people leave their country and go to other countries to live and work. why do you think it is happening? do the advantages of this trend outweights its disadvantages?

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 an increasing number of
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 are moving abroad to find better opportunities and live permanently.
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 there are a variety of factors responsible for it, I believe it is a positive development. There are a number of reasons why many
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 are migrating to developed countries. One possible reason is that moving abroad helps
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 have a higher standard of living.
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 is because
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 think that when they
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 abroad, they will have promising employment opportunities, improved medical facilities, and quality of education. Another reason why
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move
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 is that they want to ensure the safety of their family members and themselves.
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,
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 security in many undeveloped countries is alarmingly low so
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move
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 to see the safety of
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.
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, the political instability of a
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 often makes it challenging for ordinary
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 to live a settled
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.
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, they decided to immigrate to other countries to live a stable
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. Travelling to a new
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 to work and live permanently is a positive change for several reasons.
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, if anyone moves to a foreign nation, he or she will get the opportunity to learn a new language and interact with
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 of a different culture. The possibility of learning a new language and interacting with diverse groups of
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 will allow them to live a more meaningful
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.
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,
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 can
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 support the economy of their home
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 if they work abroad.
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, many workers from different developing nations help boost the economy of their home
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. In conclusion,
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people
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move
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 for various purposes, in my opinion,
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 tendency is better for individuals and society as a whole.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear central topic that is expanded on with relevant supporting details. Use a range of cohesive devices effectively but avoid overloading the text.
task achievement
Expand upon your ideas with more specific details and examples. Make sure each paragraph contributes directly to a comprehensive answer to both parts of the question: the reasons for the trend and a balanced discussion of its advantages and disadvantages.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic migration
  • expatriate
  • brain drain
  • career advancement
  • standard of living
  • social unrest
  • emigration
  • cultural assimilation
  • xenophobia
  • demographic
  • skilled labor
  • infrastructure strain
  • diaspora
  • multiculturalism
  • visa regulations
  • cross-cultural interactions
  • globalization
  • work-life balance
  • bilateral agreements
  • integration policies
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