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The pie chart below shows the frequency of U.S. Adults’ online purchasing habits in 2015, while the bar chart shows a further classification denoting online purchasing preferences. Summarise the data by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart below shows the frequency of U.S. Adults’ online purchasing habits in 2015, while the bar chart shows a further classification denoting online purchasing preferences. Summarise the data by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie
chart
 illustrates the proportion of online buying by American adults in 2015, whilst the bar
chart
 depicts the percentages of those who like shopping in different
market places
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marketplaces
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. From the two charts, it can be seen that the highest percentage of people who bought online
was for
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the
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less often and most
of
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apply
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adults
preffered
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preferred
 physical shopping to online shopping.
According to
 the pie
chart
, people who were not often buying goods from virtual shops accounted for 37% and those
that
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who
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 had a few times to shop reached more than a quarter.
Moreover
, less than a fifth of people never purchased online which was slightly higher than the weekly buyers standing at 15%. Meanwhile, from the bar
chart
, the less frequent customers buying products from
physical
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 market had the highest percentage around
four-fifth
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four-fifths
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. There was a similarity between all and weekly online buyers which purchased more goods from physical shops at around 60% and under 40% from virtual stores,
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • bar chart
  • online purchasing habits
  • frequency
  • classification
  • summarise
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • demographics
  • consumer trends
  • e-commerce
  • data interpretation
  • purchasing categories
  • fiscal analysis
  • technological influence
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