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The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the informahtion by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the informahtion by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart provides information about various types of
jobs
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 and
its
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their
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 earnings in the UK,
while
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 the table displays data related to their working
hours
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 per week.
Overall
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, the amount of incomes of some
jobs
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had
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apply
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an
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apply
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increase
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 after three years.
On the other hand
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, some particular
jobs
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 have more working
hours
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 than others.
According to
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 the bar chart, there are two variable of
comparisons
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comparison
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 which is salary when started and salary after three years. A career that
become
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becomes
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 the highest earner is underground driver at around 50.000,
this
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 number is double to police salary compared
at
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apply
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same time at around 25.000. The income of nurses had become the lowest in those
jobs
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 mentioned with just below 20.000. Based on the table of working
hours
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, teacher and firefighter are two
jobs
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 with the highest proportion of time for work at 55
hours
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 per week. The
others
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other
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jobs
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such
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 as police, nurse, and underground driver are working in
lesser
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a lesser
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 amount of time. In a week, police are working for 40
hours
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in
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on
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avarage
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average
 followed by
nurse
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nurses
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 at 38
hours
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 and underground
driver
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drivers
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 at 36% respectively.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words jobs, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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