Some people think that cars are the best way to travel in a city, while others think that bicycle is better. Discuss both point of views and give your opinion
A bunch of
people
think that travelling by Use synonyms
a
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apply
car
within a city is the only best Use synonyms
option
Use synonyms
while
another group prefers Linking Words
bicycles
. Both vehicles have fairly different benefits and issues. It all depends on the personal choice Use synonyms
one
prefers, Use synonyms
such
as a comfortable, Linking Words
dirt free
ride by Add a hyphen
dirt-free
a
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apply
car
or a healthy and Use synonyms
traffic free
ride on a bicycle. In my opinion, the second ideology has more weightage as Add a hyphen
traffic-free
its
always better to opt Replace the word
it's
it is
the
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for the
environment friendly
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environment-friendly
option
.
First and foremost, Use synonyms
Use synonyms
cars
production has increased over Change the noun form
car
years
based on the immense demand. Statistically, Correct article usage
the years
people
have bought more Use synonyms
cars
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last
year since its origin. Linking Words
This
gives a clear idea that comfort comes Linking Words
first,
when a person commutes from home to Linking Words
office
, the only thing that matters is an easy chill ride. Correct article usage
the office
Secondly
, in a Linking Words
car
Use synonyms
one
doesn’t Use synonyms
has
to face the harsh air outside and destroy the skin, Change the verb form
have
one
can close windows put an air conditioner or heater on and travel enjoying the music. Use synonyms
Thus
, a Linking Words
car
can always be Use synonyms
a
preferred over any other ride.
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apply
On the other hand
, Linking Words
bicycles
are always a healthy Use synonyms
option
. Use synonyms
Firstly
, if Linking Words
majority
starts using Correct article usage
the majority
bicycles
the world can be healthier today as it will serve as a daily exercise for Use synonyms
people
in their busy routines. Use synonyms
Secondly
, today, when everyone is in a hurry, more traffic jams are seen on the road as everyone owns a Linking Words
car
. Here, Use synonyms
bicycles
can save Use synonyms
this
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wastage
of time, Replace the word
waste
one
can make shortcuts and reach the destination on time. Use synonyms
Moreover
, a big Linking Words
car
polluting the atmosphere, blocking the whole road and Use synonyms
is
actually carrying only Unnecessary verb
apply
one
person doesn’t really make sense. Use synonyms
Hence
, it is essential that Linking Words
people
pick Use synonyms
bicycles
for day-to-day Use synonyms
routines
travel within the city.
In conclusion, some Fix the agreement mistake
routine
group
of Fix the agreement mistake
groups
people
consider Use synonyms
cars
Use synonyms
to
travel and others Change preposition
for
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instead
like Rephrase
apply
bicycles
better. Both rides are widely used Use synonyms
however
, Linking Words
cars
define comfort Use synonyms
while
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bicycles
are healthier. If I summarize Use synonyms
this
, both can be of great use, Linking Words
one
must pick based on Use synonyms
requirement
at that moment. I opine more with the bicycle rides as a healthy and Add an article
the requirement
environment friendly
Add a hyphen
environment-friendly
option
.Use synonyms
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task achievement
Ensure that you explore both views independently and in equal measure, and sufficiently develop each viewpoint with clear arguments and supporting details. Avoid uneven development of points which may not fully satisfy the requirement of presenting a balanced view of both sides.
coherence cohesion
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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Linking words for giving examples:
- for example
- for instance
- to illustrate this
- to give a clear example
- such as
- namely
- to illustrate
- take, for example