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The table below shows expenditure of four car companies on advertising in the UK in 2002.

The table below shows expenditure of four car companies on advertising in the UK in 2002.
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 table denotes how
expenditure
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the expenditure
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 of
renault
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Renault
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, rover,
vauxhall
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Vauxhall
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, and
cetirizine
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 companies spent the amounts of money in the UK
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 different activities during the year 2002.
Overall
, it can be seen that there had been the highest number in the percentage of advertising for press and TV, similarities are radio,
while
 the lowest in outdoors and cinema in the year 2002. Getting back to the details, press and TV advertising was predominated by cetirizine which was the largest amount across the board exactly at 70
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million
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millions
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 by TV. There was followed by
vauxhall
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 and
renault
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 around
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65 and 45
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dollars
. Meanwhile,
rover
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 was only 38
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million
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dollars
 and less than others at around 12 and 8
millions
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million
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dollars
 were
vauxhall
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Vauxhall
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 and
cetirizine
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.
However
, the investment
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 advertising had similarities
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 radio for four car companies at 15 million
dollars
.
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the outlay of advertising was lowest
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outdoor in
four
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 companies by merely
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7
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million
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dollars
,
while
 (
bycinema
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by cinema
cinema
) was less prominent at 6 to 3
millions
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million
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dollars
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words millions, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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