The table below gives information about the population of New Zealand between 2011 and 2012
The given table illustrates the data related to
number
of people Change the article
a number
the number
lived
in New Zealand from 2011 to 2012.
Correct pronoun usage
who lived
Overall
, it is clear that
the most significant change was seen in the 65+ ages
Change the noun form
age
group
, and the total population increased throughout period
.
In detail, the number of people who were Add an article
the period
at
under 15 Change preposition
apply
years
old and between 15 and 39 years
old decreased 0.2% over the period. In terms of age
Correct article usage
the age
group
between 15-39, which were
the most crowded Correct subject-verb agreement
was
group
in 2011, the population of this
group
decreased from 1,520,000 to 1,500,000. Additionally
, despite a slight decrease in this
field, this
age group
represented the most crowded age group
in 2012, too. Number
of people who were between 40 and 64 Change the article
A number
The number
years
old, and 65+ years
old rose, and their percentage of increase were 0,6% and 0,4%, respectively. Lastly
, total
population increased Add an article
the total
0,6
%Change preposition
by 0,6
,
and reached Remove the comma
apply
at
4,460,000 from 4,400,000 over Change preposition
apply
this
period.Submitted by ilaydailday on
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words group, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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