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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should a learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #reason #language #travel #work #country #someone #learn
Every
county
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country
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have
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 their own different
languages
. Some
people
 can speak more
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 3-4
languages
 and some are only able to speak their native. I personally believe that individuals need to learn various
languages
as well as
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also
 depend upon everyone's personal interstates. In today's era, most of the kids are learning various
languages
 because they
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think
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 that they can make their career in that. On the one side, learning a foreign
language
 is the best thing because
people
 can easily understand other's emotions
as well
as
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and
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 it is easy for them to survive in
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 country or area where they are living as
a
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foreign
worker
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workers
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.
Secondly
,
people
 can make their career in it.
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For
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 instance,There are so many industries that
countinously
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continuously
 hiring
people
 for work with special
bonus
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bonuses
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 who can speak more
then
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than
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 4-5
languages
. On the other side,
people
 do not need to worry about other
languages
 because if they are going to live in their native place
then
 they just only need to use their
language
. In society, some individuals are not good in
languages
 or in studies so it is a hard task for them.
For example
,
mostly
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almost
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 90%
people
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of people
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are using
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use
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 their own
language
while
 they are going
in
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to
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 hospitals or
in
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apply
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schools as a first
language
.
To conclude
, it is totally
person's
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a person's
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 own choice
that
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what they want to learn or it
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also
depend
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 upon their ability to
understanding
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understand
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coherence cohesion
The essay lacks a clear logical structure, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of ideas. The argument should be organized into clear paragraphs, with each paragraph focusing on a single main idea, supported by specific examples or explanations. Transitional phrases can also help in guiding the reader through the arguments made.
task achievement
The response touches on both views of the argument but fails to provide a clear, detailed explanation of why people might learn a foreign language beyond travel and work. The examples used are too general and do not effectively illustrate the points. A complete response must thoroughly address all parts of the prompt, including a clear personal opinion, which is underdeveloped in this essay.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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