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the pie charts and table give information about the total value and sources of fish imported to the us between 1988 and 2000. summarise the information and comparing

the pie charts and table give information about the total value and sources of fish imported to the us between 1988 and 2000. summarise the information and comparing
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The pie charts and table illustrate the total value of fishing in the US and three different countries which imported fish to the US between 1988 and 2000.
Overall
, it can be seen that the total value of fishing rose throughout
period
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.
Additionaly
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, in the
beginning
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percentage
 of
Canada
 far exceeded
from
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the other figures,
however
 in 2000
this
 category represented
in
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the lowest
percentage
. In detail, the total value of fishing was 6.57
billions
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of
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dollars in 1988 and
this
 figure gradually increased over the period, with approximately 2
billions
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of
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dollars
rose
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per year,
reached at
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 10.72
billions
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of
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dollars in 2000. Turning to the pie charts,
Canada
 had the highest
percentage
 in 1988 (60%) which almost doubled the rate of others’s
percentage
 in that year. Meanwhile, China had the lowest
percentage
 at 13%. The category of others peaked in 1992
an
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 represented 46% in 1992.
This
 figure followed by
Canada
 and China, accounted for 34% and 29%, respectively. The pie chart which symbolises the year
of
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2000, the category of others was higher (42%) than the other two categories, the second
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percentage
was belonged
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China
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 which nearly
one
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in
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third,
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followed by
Canada
 which dramatically decreased over the period from 60% to 28%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, canada with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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