"Obesity rates are on the rise globally. Discuss the main factors contributing to this health crisis and propose possible solutions to address it."
In the world,
obesity
is a very big problem. It happens with some, and this
agonizes many people
. After providing a careful analysis of why obesity
has risen so sharply globally, I will suggest a few ways in which the obesity
epidemic can be ameliorated.
To begin
with, obesity
is now a very prominent disease in a certain sense. That's a lot of reasons. Firstly
, poor eating is that eat
fast Wrong verb form
eating
food
, semi - finished
foods and Add a hyphen
semi-finished
that is
the main reason Change preposition
for
of
corpulence. In fact, little over one-third of adults eat on any given day and that’s about 84.8 million adults eating fast Change preposition
for
food
or semi – finished
foods every day. Correct your spelling
semi–finished
As a result
, every year around 11 people
die with reason of it, and it is more than smoking. Secondly
, a sleep routine very
important for fat loss. Add a missing verb
is very
Since there
is mounting evidence that Correct word choice
There
people
who get too little or more have a higher risk of weight gain and obesity
than people
who get seven to eight hours of sleep at night.
However
, despite the severity of the obesity
problem, there are many ways in which it could battle it more effectively. He
best way Correct your spelling
The
Fix the infinitive
to treats
treats
Correct subject-verb agreement
treat
obesity
is to eat a healthy, reduced-calorie diet and exercise regularly. For example
: some countries could put far more pressure on fast food
outlets to provide healthy alternatives to semi-finished foods and soft drinks and they act to increase and provide healthy outlets.
In conclusion, obesity’s
Correct your spelling
obesity is
reasons are
poor diet and wrong sleep routine, and Verb problem
caused by
solution
is that increase healthy Add an article
the solution
a solution
food
outlets with pressure on fast food
sales points. Although
obesity
is serious
issue in the world, if the above steps are taken, Add an article
a serious
this
situation will surely improve in the coming yearsSubmitted by javohirforwork on
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Introduction/Conclusion
Ensure that your essay has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. The introduction must paraphrase the question and state your position, while the conclusion should summarize the main points and restate your position.
Paragraphing
Aim to structure your paragraphs logically, with a clear central idea in each and coherent transition sentences connecting them.
Supporting Details
Support your main points with specific examples and explanations. Vague statements weaken your argument.
Task Completion
Address all parts of the task, ensuring thorough discussion of the causes and potential solutions for obesity.
Grammar
Work on grammar accuracy and range, avoiding fragments and run-on sentences. Use a variety of complex sentences to express your ideas.
Vocabulary
Avoid repetition of ideas and phrases. Expand your vocabulary to express ideas more precisely.
Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic
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You essay structure should look something like this:
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – Problems
- Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
- Conclusion
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- One of the first problems of the...
- Another problem that needs to be considered...
- A possible solution to this problem would be...
- One immediate practical solution is to...