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Band 5.5

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

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The following 2 maps compare the pivotal changes in the
enterances
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entrances
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 of city
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hospitals
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hospital
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 from 2007 to 2010. In an
overall
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 context, the construction of novel car parks for the staff and public in
the
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separate places and the erection of the new roads are notable alterations over the span of 3 years. Examining the details, the bus stops along
the
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both
side
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 of Hospital Road were knocked down, and the new bus station was built
in
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 the left.
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, the former car park at the right gave its place to
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the
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parking for only the
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staff
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staffs
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, and the new parking space for
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the public
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public
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 was constructed in the east part of the layout .
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, the roads underwent crucial changes in terms of building roundabouts in front of the hospital and at the crossing of City and Hospital
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • dual carriageway
  • roundabout
  • traffic flow
  • multi-story car park
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian provisions
  • footpaths
  • traffic signals
  • construction phase
  • ambulances
  • carriageway expansion
  • traffic congestion
  • pedestrian crossings
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure development
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