It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for spots or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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different activities, like sports or music.
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that to become a good actor or runner can have been learned. There is no shadow of a doubt that
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many people are born with aptitudes in art or physical activities. It is sensible
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that, if someone does not have abilities to play the piano, it will be challenging to become the best of the best in
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talented
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games. Not only a good physical shape is a
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a real top-class sportsman, but
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success. To take a more direct approach, the well-known swimmer Michael
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eight hours not from time to time, but day by day. In conclusion, as it may seem,
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true talent are given to people by birth, but I utterly believe that, if families can see the skills in their child, it has to be developed with
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and extracurricular activities, as long as it is the only way to forge a true star.
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