The chart below show the percentage of the day working adults spent doing different activities in a particular country in 1958 and in 2008.

The chart below show the percentage of the day working adults spent doing different activities in a particular country in 1958 and in 2008.
The bar charts compare the percentage of time-consuming
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different activities by adults in a country in 1958 and in 2008.
Overall
, it is true that over the 50-year period, people have spent much of their time at work. Activities
such
as travelling to work and relaxing at home have increased over the years,
while
the percentage of sleeping and going out
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decreased.
It is clear that
working is the activity which most of the citizens have spent the most over the period shown, being 33% in 1958 and reaching 42% in 2008. The figure of sleeping was the second of their favourite task in 1958, with nearly 32%;
however
, it decreased to 25% after fifty years. The third favourite one was going out with friends or families, it had 19% of the day
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people joining in 1958, but it fell to 6% in 2008.
On the other hand
, the number of resting at home and travelling to work
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risen significantly, with
initially
8%, 2% to 13% and 8% in 2008.
Additionally
, the percentage of playing sports or spending time with their hobbies has remained steady over the period shown, with 6%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • technological advancements
  • leisure activities
  • household chores
  • gender roles
  • modern lifestyle
  • fast food trends
  • sleep patterns
  • health and well-being
  • societal impact
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