The chart below show the percentage of the day working adults spent doing different activities in a particular country in 1958 and in 2008.
The bar charts compare the percentage of time-consuming
in
different activities by adults in a country in 1958 and in 2008.
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Overall
, it is true that over the 50-year period, people have spent much of their time at work. Activities Linking Words
such
as travelling to work and relaxing at home have increased over the years, Linking Words
while
the percentage of sleeping and going out Linking Words
have
decreased.
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It is clear that
working is the activity which most of the citizens have spent the most over the period shown, being 33% in 1958 and reaching 42% in 2008. The figure of sleeping was the second of their favourite task in 1958, with nearly 32%; Linking Words
however
, it decreased to 25% after fifty years. The third favourite one was going out with friends or families, it had 19% of the day Linking Words
of
people joining in 1958, but it fell to 6% in 2008.
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On the other hand
, the number of resting at home and travelling to workLinking Words
have
risen significantly, with Correct subject-verb agreement
has
initially
8%, 2% to 13% and 8% in 2008. Linking Words
Additionally
, the percentage of playing sports or spending time with their hobbies has remained steady over the period shown, with 6%.Linking Words
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