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the charts show average levels of paticipation in education and the highest education level of adults from 2000 to 2010 in Singapore

the charts show average levels of paticipation in education and the highest education level of adults from 2000 to 2010 in Singapore
#show #levels #paticipation #education #level #adults #singapore
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The charts
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 the number of adult people that take
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vocational
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education
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 and the highest
education
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level
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 in Singapore
on
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 five categories
in
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from
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 2000 to 2010. The
level
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 of
education
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are
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 measured in percentage.
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, all people who
take
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took
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education
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 over
ten
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years
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 was male which was almost
one to third
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one-third
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 more than
that
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of
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adult female and the lowest gender who
take
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education
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 was female. University degree was higher than that
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of the
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 other levels. In
term
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 of
average
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 number of
years
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 spent at school adult males spent most at more than
ten
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years
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 but less than twelve
years
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 in 2010. Compared to
other
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 gender which spent
at
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less than
ten
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years
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 in 2010.
In
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 the other hand
highschool
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high school
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 qualification was the highest
level
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 of
education
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 at 32.13% in 2010 and it significantly decreased over
ten
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years
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 later
at
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 19.55%. As opposed university qualification was higher at 32.93% in 2010. The lowest number of
education
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level
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 was
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the master
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master
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 qualification at 7.5% in 2000 and it increased almost four
time
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times
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 over
ten
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years
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at
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 30.31% in 2010.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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