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Every year more and more students chose to study online rather than attend classes on campus. what do you think are the cause of this ? what sollutions can you suggest ?

#year #students #study #classes #campus #sollutions
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Nowadays, online
classes
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 are more popular among
students
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 than in-person
classes
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.
This
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interests
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 and
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 suggest that the
university
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 contributes to making pupils come back to face-to-face
classes
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. One factor that leads to
students
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 be more interested in online
classes
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 is the effectiveness and efficiency of its
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. online class just needs advanced technology to support
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 activity.
students
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 can use their computers to connect with their fellow pairs in learning the subjects given. They do not need to spend much
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 and money to attend
offline
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classes
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 at the
university
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. It means
students
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 can save their expenditure and
energy
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 for other purposes.
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due to
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 COVID-19, many
students
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 in the world study from home using their laptops and do not need the expense of transportation.
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online class seems to be more effective and save
energy
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, they will reduce the emotional sense toward teacher and
students
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. it will be better for the
university
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 to make some effort to motivate
students
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 to attend
offline
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 studying. many attempts can be made by the
university
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, one of which is to create a new studying
method
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that is
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 more attractive to
students
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 with a blended learning
method
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. The blended learning
method
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 is the
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, online and
offline
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 studying at the same time. For theoretical outcomes, it can use online
classes
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 but for practicum, it will be better to hold in-person
classes
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.
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, the nursing lecturer can give online studying to increase the student's understanding of the subject given, but when it comes to the practical session
students
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 have to attend the
university
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 to implement the theory learned. In conclusion, many
students
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 are more likely to take online
classes
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 on the grounds that it is more effective, saving
energy
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, time and expense.
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, the
University
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 can make some effort to conduct blinded learning to encourage
students
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 to present the
offline
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 class.
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