The diagram illustrates the Life Cycle process of frogs in a pond. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram illustrates the Life Cycle process of frogs in a pond. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates
that
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the
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process
of the
frog
's lifecycle in a pond. There are
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a totally
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totally
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total
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eleven
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of eleven
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stage
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stages
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of
process
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the process
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from
eggs
to an adult
frog
.
Overall
from
the
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this
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perspective,
eggs
are the first
stage
of
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the lifecyle
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lifecyle
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lifecycle
process
and
enbryo
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embryo
is the main
stage
of
this
process
.
The
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According
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according to
the diagrams shows that,
the
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apply
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eggs
are the primary steps for the lifecycle
process
then
eggs
will become
embryo
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embryos
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. After that
ebryo
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embryo
embryos
can be
coverted
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covered
into
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by
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the tadpoles clinging and
this
located
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is located
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in the water plant. The external gills breathing is the next
process
for
this
cycle
then
tail growing is the fifth
stage
of
this
lifecycle
process
.
Thereafter
, lives from food stored in the tail to survive and the
tails
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tail
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are becoming
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becomes
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shorter when it grows.
In addition
, the young
forg
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frog
for
is the before final
stage
of
this
process
then
the final step is the young
frog
to become an adult
frog
in a pond.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, frog, stage, eggs with synonyms.
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