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The diagram illustrates the Life Cycle process of frogs in a pond. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram illustrates the Life Cycle process of frogs in a pond. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates
that
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the
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process
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 of the
frog
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's lifecycle in a pond. There are
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a totally
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totally
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total
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eleven
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of eleven
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stage
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stages
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 of
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process
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the process
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 from
eggs
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 to an adult
frog
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.
Overall
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 from
the
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this
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 perspective,
eggs
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 are the first
stage
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 of
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the lifecyle
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lifecyle
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lifecycle
process
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 and
enbryo
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embryo
 is the main
stage
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 of
this
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process
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.
The
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According
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according to
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 the diagrams shows that,
the
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apply
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eggs
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 are the primary steps for the lifecycle
process
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then
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eggs
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 will become
embryo
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embryos
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. After that
ebryo
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embryo
embryos
 can be
coverted
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covered
into
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by
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 the tadpoles clinging and
this
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located
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is located
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 in the water plant. The external gills breathing is the next
process
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 for
this
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 cycle
then
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 tail growing is the fifth
stage
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 of
this
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 lifecycle
process
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.
Thereafter
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, lives from food stored in the tail to survive and the
tails
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tail
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are becoming
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becomes
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 shorter when it grows.
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, the young
forg
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frog
for
 is the before final
stage
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 of
this
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process
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then
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 the final step is the young
frog
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 to become an adult
frog
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 in a pond.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, frog, stage, eggs with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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