Task 1: The graph below shows the number of Asian elephants between 1997 and 2004.

Task 1: The graph below shows the number of Asian elephants between 1997 and 2004.
The graph below illustrates the
number
of Asian elephants in 9
countries
in 2 years.
Overall
,
while
there was a downward trend in some
countries
, others experienced stability.
Whereas
the least
number
belonged to China, the opposite was seen in India. Starting with 10000, the total
number
of Indian elephants was the highest, with 2500 more than Myanmar and over half of Thailand in 1997. After 7 years, three
countries
also
witnessed a decrease, [with which,] the drop in Thailand was the largest at 70%, followed by India at 25%, and a decline of 300, equal to 10%, in Myanmar.
On the other hand
, Malaysia and Sri Lanka shared a similar
number
of 3000 in 1997, followed by three Indochina
countries
. Beginning at 1000, China was the lowest, which was
one tenth
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(10%
of
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) of India.
However
, in the next 7 years,
while
Sri Lanka’s, Vietnam’s, Lao’s, and Cambodia’s elephant population stabilized, the opposite was seen in Malaysia with a plunge of 2000 and China with a 50% reduction equal to 1000.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, countries with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuated
  • decline
  • increase
  • drop
  • steady decrease
  • recover
  • habitat loss
  • poaching
  • efforts
  • protect
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