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Some people say success in a person’s life as an adult is the result of the way he was brought up by his parents. Do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
there is no denying the fact that to be successful in your
life
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reflecting
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 it is a commonly held belief that your
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childhood
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childhood period
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period
 is very important to
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achieve
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achieving
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 an argument that
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their
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Body paragraph 1
to begin
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they
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have
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 immense
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responsibility
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responsibility
about
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 improvement in
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children's
childerins
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children's
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life
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in other words
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 to
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help
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help
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increase
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improve
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their
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level
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 system for
life
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creative
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caring
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them
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Body paragraph 2
Another point to consider is
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that
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education
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education
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play
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emportant
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important
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teaching
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teaching
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effective
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effective
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 if they have a great
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education
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education
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improve
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send
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spend
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activate
activities
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activity
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 to expend their reach
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conclusion
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people
 having different views,
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beleve
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believe
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course
 the parents are so
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important
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in making
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childerin
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children
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really amazing
life
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 when they become
adulte
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adults
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure clarity and coherence by organizing your essay with clear paragraphs, each with a single main idea. Connect your ideas with logical sequencing and appropriate linking words.
Coherence & Cohesion
Introduce your essay with a brief explanation of the topic and your opinion. Your conclusion should summarize the main points and restate your position.
Coherence & Cohesion
Support your main points with relevant examples. Make sure each paragraph focuses on a single aspect of the argument and provides evidence for your opinion.
Task Achievement
Address all parts of the task, make your position clear and provide a thorough answer that covers all aspects of the prompt.
Task Achievement
Use specific examples to support your ideas. General statements should be supplemented with precise information to validate your arguments.
Task Achievement
Improve the comprehensiveness of your ideas through clear expression. Work on grammar and vocabulary to convey your points more effectively.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • upbringing
  • nurturing
  • discipline
  • emotional support
  • role modeling
  • socioeconomic status
  • resilience
  • determinism
  • aspirations
  • self-esteem
  • confidence
  • educational opportunities
  • personal choices
  • influences
  • financial resources
  • success
  • development
  • initiative
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