modern technology is changing our world This has advantages such as bringing people together through communication it also has disadvantages such as destroying differences between cultures To what extent agree or disagree ===========================================
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becoming
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addicted
on
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to
due
to Correct word choice
and due
this
they would again both negative and positive impacts. This
essay will articulate both impacts.
Today, as technology
appear considerably it has completely change
our life. Change the verb form
changed
Firstly
, it has a major positive effect on person's
life. I mean by Correct article usage
a person's
this
platforms make the whole world as
a small village. Citizens could connect with other Change preposition
apply
people
easily with out
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without
waste
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wasting
friend
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friends
people
from other countries. For instance
, if anyone live
in another country. Change the verb form
lives
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With
this
technology
they will Add a comma
technology,
attain
with their family even if by Verb problem
communicate
videos
call or just sound. Change the noun form
video
Consequently
,I think it's anquate
advantage.
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adequate
quite
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, technology
has also
drowback
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drawback
drawbacks
such
as gain
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gaining
a
bad Correct article usage
apply
behavior
to be more Change the spelling
behaviour
priece
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precise
comunities
would Correct your spelling
communities
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face
behavior
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behaviour
well known
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well-known
people
. Therefore
, they might be get
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get
aride
their culture because perhaps because of all that they will be in respect Correct your spelling
against
people
because they destroy their culture due to
the other lifestyle.
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conclusion, social media has both advantages and disadvantages, Correct your spelling
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however
it seems to me because Add a comma
however,
of
our minds Change preposition
apply
became
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have
more
wider the advantages Change the word
apply
are outweigh
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outweigh
disadvantages
.Correct article usage
the disadvantages
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