THE DIAGRAM BELOW SHOW THE WATER CYCLE , WHICH IS THE CONTINUOUS MOVEMENT OF WATER ON, ABOVE AND BELOW THE SURFACE OF THE EARTH.

THE DIAGRAM BELOW SHOW THE WATER CYCLE , WHICH IS THE CONTINUOUS MOVEMENT OF WATER ON, ABOVE AND BELOW THE SURFACE OF THE EARTH.
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illustrated
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the
water
cycle
that
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which
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is the non-stop development of
water
on, above and below the surface of the Earth.
Overall
, the
water
cycle
is
natural
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process and it has 3 main stages
beginnig
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beginning
with evaporation,followed by cold
prucipitation
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precipitation
and
finally
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the imprevious
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imprevious
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impervious
previous
layer.
Firstly
,
water
in the
ocean
is evaporation.
Apart from
this
80% of
water
vapour in the air is from the
ocean
. Heat causes the condensing
water
vapour to form clouds. In the next stage, the process called ‘precipitation occurs in which the
water
falls in the form of rain or snow. The final stage of the
cycle
is when the
water
takes various paths. Some
water
form
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from
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lakes
whereas
some
if
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of
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it may travel to the
ocean
as groundwater.
Otherwise
, some
water
may
also
reach the impervious layer and
then
makes
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make
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their
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its
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way towards the sea.
However
, the process of
salt
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saltwater
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water
intrusion takes place before the
water
enters the
ocean
. Having completed all these steps, the
cycle
then
begins again.
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