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The internet has greatly increased our access to information. To what extent do you think this is a good thing? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

#internet #access #information #minutes
First of all,the
internet
 made our
life
 more
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easier
year
 than in the past because of websites and Google.
However
,the technology
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 advantages and disadvantages.And I will write my opinion in the conclusion. On the first hand,the positive thing for the
internet
.
Firstly
,the network makes
life
 simpler than our parent's
life
 because the science is easy you can just type what you search about it on the website and in
moument
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moment
moments
 you will get the website .
Moreover
, it makes it much easier
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we
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us
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 can talk by chatting if our
plaes
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phones
 are noisy our calling free call any time and anywhere. On the second hand the negative side.The
internet
 keeps ass
more lazy
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 because we do not need to search by reading or ask
people
 if they have information
also
 we lose our reading skills after the
internet
.
Furthermore
,
people
 not like in the past meet each other face to face,
also
 it is not good for the old
people
 they do not know how to use the
internet
 to contact. In my opinion the advantages of the
internet
more
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 than the disadvantages.
Moreover
, the
internet
 help
help
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government to keep
life
 essay as we see it help
people
 in a lot of subjects like the police,doctors,firemen, officer, employees and everybody.
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Task Response
Task Response: The essay does not fully address all parts of the task. While the essay does attempt to discuss the internet's impact on accessibility to information, it fails to specifically address the extent to which this access is beneficial. Ensure that all parts of the prompt are addressed and that a clear opinion is stated and developed throughout the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Coherence and Cohesion: The structure of the essay is confusing, with ideas presented in a disorganized manner. Use clear paragraphing to separate different ideas and improve readability. Work on using cohesive devices to link sentences and paragraphs together more effectively.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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