Most of the urgent problems can only be solved with international cooperation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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of nations become closer. There
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many urgent and serious
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urgent issues can only be addressed with international
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. I would partly agree with
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. Admittedly, part of urgent
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international
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immediate
. Take war
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would face
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situations, like injury,
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, the lack of food and drink, and even the threat
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life. Above these
problems
,
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government cannot solve these by
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themselves
.The only method is via international
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,
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international organisations
or the
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governments
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these
problems
, about
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for these
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refugees
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can solved by other countries,
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rate.
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issue is long-term and associated with various aspects of domestic, like education, employment, the policy of punishment and so on. The domestic
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government
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on the help of other countries. Despite
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this
, the local
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as references
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improvement. In conclusion, I agree with
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cooperation
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domestic
problems
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