The pie charts below show the percentage of five kinds of books sold by a booksellere between 1972 and 2012

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The pizza graphs above describe the percentage of five different types of

books

sold by a shop from 1972 to 2012. It

is showed

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shows

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three charts, one in 1972,

other

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the other

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in 1992, and the

last

in 2012.

Overall

, in 1972 and 1992, there was almost the same distribution of all categories, but in 2012,

books

about

adult

fiction

increased a lot and

biography

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biographies

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decreased quite

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show examples

Analysing the data about 1972, it is possible

to conclude

that three kinds of

books

sharing

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the preference of the readers:

adult

fiction

, children's

fiction

, and biography, each one with 20%. The group "others" got 25%. Twenty years later, in 1992, the scenario has

change

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changed

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little.

Adult

fiction

raised

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rose

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to 25%, children's

fiction

raised

Verb problem

rose

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to 22% and biography dropped to 15%. After more

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than 20

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years, in 2012

adult

fiction

jump

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jumped

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to 45%, kids'

book

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books

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increased

only

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by only

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3%,

whereas

books

about

life

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the life

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story

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stories

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of people

fall

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fell

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to just 8%. Travel

books

and the class "others" complete the pie chart. Both groups

achieving

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achieved

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the

less

Correct word choice

lowest

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percentage in the

last

period.

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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

173 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

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