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You are working for an international company and you would like to request time off for a family event. Write a letter to your boss Explaining what the celebration is Asking for the time off Explaining how you can get work done when you take time off

Dear Mr. Adam, My name is Mikhael
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 I am writing
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 letter to request permission for my break
time
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, because next week I have a family gathering in Bali.
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 with, next week my big family
had
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 a plan to have a gathering, because we have not gathered for the past 10 years. At the event, we will enjoy our
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 eating some good food, exploring the city and having fun.
This
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 event is supposed to cheer our grandparents because we never know when the
time
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 will come.
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, I would like to get your permission to come to the family gathering. Because
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 I did not have much
time
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 for my family.
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, I will keep my performance for the company. If there is work to get done, I will finish all of the work before my break
time
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. I am waiting for your prompt response. Yours sincerely, Mikhael

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task response
Say the goal in one line at the top of the letter.
coherence
Put one idea in each paragraph.
vocabulary
Use clear and short words.
tone
The tone is polite.
purpose
You show your wish with care.
planning
You say you will finish work before you leave.
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