The graph shows data about the average Saturday sales of two bakeries in London in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph illustrates information about the average Saturday
sales
of two different bakeries Lovely Loaves
and Bernie's Buns in London in the year 2010.
Overall
, it is clear from the graph that the average number of items
sold in Bernie's Buns experienced a higher amount of sales
than in Lovely Loaves
. Moreover
, both bakeries had undergone some fluctuations throughout the period. Furthermore
, the
Correct article usage
apply
items
like cakes
, cookies, rolls, crisps and doughnuts sold larger in Bernie's Bun than in Lovely Loaves
.
Firstly
, the items
cakes
and cookies crossed above 100 and there was a steady decrease in sales
of rolls around 77 items
followed by other items
fresh loaves
, toasted sandwiches and salads ranged
from approximately 40,23 and 19 Wrong verb form
ranging
items
. However
, the sales
started to increase with the item crisps of almost 70, there was a massive resurgence of sales
in doughnuts around 135 items
.
Secondly
, Lovely Loaves
started with sales
of about 70 cakes
and experienced a steady decrease with other items
which included cookies, rolls, fresh loaves
and roasted sandwiches had sold around 75,50,45 and 23 items
. In addition
, there was a significant rise in the sales
of salads about 63 items
before falling back to crisps decreasing below 50. Even though Lovely Loaves
started with a small amount of sales
with cakes
, it somehow managed to make a greater impact by producing doughnuts ranging from about 121 items
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