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the charts below give information on the ages of the populations of yemen and italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. summarize the information and make comparison. wrtie at least 150 words.

the charts below give information on the ages of the populations of yemen and italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. summarize the information and make comparison. wrtie at least 150 words.
The charts illustrate data
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 groups of populations based on the ages of
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 and Itlay in 2000 and 2050.
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, it is seen that in
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age
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group
 15-59
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 will increase and in Italy 60+
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group
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 population increase. In detail,
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's population in 2000.0-14
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group
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 proportion is the highest at 50.1% followed by 46.3% of 15-59% and the 60+
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 is 3.6%.In the forecast of 2050,the
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 population will change dramatically.The 15-59
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 class will have the highest percentage57.3% followed by the 0-14
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 37% and 5.7% respectively.
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 ,Italy has the highest
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 of the 15-59
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 in 2050 it will decrease to 46.2%.The 60+
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 was 24.1% in 2000 and will increase in 2050 to 42.3%.
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 will decrease from 14.3% to 11.5% from 2000 to 2050.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words yemen, age, percentage, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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