The map shows a popular tourist destination in a city in 2000 and 2010.

The map shows a popular tourist destination in a city in 2000 and 2010.
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The two maps depict some obvious and mild changes in comparison
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the tourist destination in a metropolitan between 2000 and 2010. Looking from an
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perspective, it is evident that the underdeveloped area was modernized with more cutting-edge facilities and customer services. In terms of radical shifts, the bare land in the northwest corner of the picture was converted into a guardrail over the 10-year period.
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, a toilet was designated in the place where the gift shop used to be,
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a cafe in the heart of the map was built in 2010. What's more, the parking and hotel were erected at the removal of the barren land. With regard to mild changes, there was a barrier at the top of the graph built to separate the river and another side.
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, the trees in the southwest were more cultivated from two trees to four trees.
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in a toilet in the northeast and the heritage railway to the right of the map.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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