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The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in Manchester city centre from 2003-2012

The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in Manchester city centre from 2003-2012
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The presented chart illustrates the trends in three types of
crime
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 (burglary, car theft, and
robbery
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) that occurred in
Manchester
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city
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centre
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 in the period of 2003 to 2012.
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, the changes in those crimes show a diverse pattern, where burglary experiencing a decline, car theft displaying a fluctuation, and
robbery
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 witnessing stability. The data shows that burglary was
initially
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 recorded as the highest
crime
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 committed in
Manchester
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city
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centre
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.
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, its number dropped sharply from approximately 3,700 in 2004 to just above 1,000 in 2008, before rising to slightly below 1,500 in 2009 and levelling off until 2012.
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, car theft experienced a fluctuation from 2003 to 2008 before continuing to rise to around 2,800 in 2012, eventually becoming the largest
crime
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 in
Manchester
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city
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centre
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. Meanwhile,
robbery
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 was the lowest
crime
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 that happened in
Manchester
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city
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centre
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 throughout the years. The number increased from slightly above 500 in 2003 to almost 1,000 in 2005 before falling to the level of 500 in 2006.
Subsequently
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, the number of
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robbery
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robberies
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 remained relatively unchanged up until 2012.
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