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The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.
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The graph gives information on how
much
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many
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 tourists came to
crouse
 ships,
island
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islands
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 and in total rate during the period of 7 years from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
,
it is clear that
,
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 there was a gradual increase in the number of
visitors
belong
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belonging
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 to all units in the given period.
Furthermore
, the figure for
total
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the total
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 rate was the
highes
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highest
 among all the provided categories. It is obviously seen from the graph that, the amount of tourists on
crouse
 ships started its popularity with around 0,7
million
 people, compared to about 0,2
million
 on
tge
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the
island
 in 2010. The proportion of
visitors
stayed
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who stayed
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 on
crouse
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the cruise
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 ship went up to roughly 1,7
million
 in 2012, despite
of
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remaining unchanged in 2011,
while
visitors
 on the
island
 increased to 0,5
million
 in 2011, before having a drop to 0,2
million
 in the next year. The rate
on
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of
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 people who stayed on
island
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the island
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 saw
a little fluctuations
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little fluctuations
a little fluctuation
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 in the next half decade and
eventually
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eventually,
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 it reached
to
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apply
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1,5
million
 in 2017.
This
 trend on
crouse
 ships climbed up
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until
untill
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until
 2017 when it
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reached
reacged
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reached
 to its peak point ( 2
million
 ) In terms of total number which was the highest among the given groups, it had a
million
visitors
in
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at
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 the beginning of the period. Until the end of the provided time, it continued to grow and in 2017, it
rised
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rose
raised
rises
 to 3,5
million
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words crouse, island, visitors, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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