The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
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The graph gives information on how many tourists came to crouse ships,
islands
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and islands
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and in total rate during the period of 7 years from 2010 to 2017.
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it is clear that
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there was a gradual increase in the number of
visitors
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belonging to all units in the given period.
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, the figure for the total rate was the highest among all the provided categories. It is obviously seen from the figures that, the amount of tourists on crouse ships started its popularity with around 0,7
million
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people, compared to about 0,2
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on the island in 2010. The proportion of
visitors
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who stayed on the cruise ship went up to roughly 1,7
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in 2012, despite remaining unchanged in 2011,
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visitors
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on the island went up to 0,5
million
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in 2011, before having a drop to 0,2
million
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in the next year. The rate of people who stayed on the island saw little fluctuations in the next half decade and eventually, it reached 1,5
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in 2017.
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trend on crouse ships climbed up until 2017 when it reached
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its peak point ( 2
million
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) In terms of total number which was the highest among the given groups, it had a
million
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visitors
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at the beginning of the period. Until the end of the provided time, it continued to grow and in 2017, it rose to 3,5
million
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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