You have recently purchased a piece of furniture, but you noticed a problem when it was delivered to you. Write a letter to the store manager and say what is the problem? how did it happen in your opinion? What do you suggest the manager should do to resolve the problem?

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Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Hitesh Dawar, I am writing to bring your attention to an issue that I recently purchased a wooden wardrobe, which was delivered to my house yesterday evening

and

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apply

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I made

this

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purchase on December 1,

2023

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2023,

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under invoice number

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apply

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#2424 After the

product

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delivery,

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while

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and while

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product

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inspection, I found the wardrobe was damaged as there was a broken handle and it had lots of scratches on the body. I am extremely disappointed as I had

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apply

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high

expectation

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expectations

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about the quality of

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product

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the product

a product

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. In my opinion, the issue arises

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while

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when

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the transportation

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apply

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and the handling of the

product

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was

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not done with proper care.

Additionally

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, the packaging was not done properly as the outer box was

torned

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torn

turned

and not covered properly. Anyhow, I am a regular customer of your store and had never

such

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issues. I cannot use

this

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product

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and strongly doubt

about

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the adequate quality of the

product

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. I appreciate your prompt action on

this

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matter and replace the

product

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as soon as possible. I look forward to a quick resolution.

Your

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Yours

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sincerely, Hitesh Dawar

hiteshpaulSat Dec 02 2023

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Task Achievement

Ensure that all aspects of the question are addressed thoroughly; although you provided an overview of the situation, specific details on how exactly it happened are missing.

Coherence and Cohesion

Aim to enhance the clarity and organization of your paragraphs by connecting ideas more smoothly and using a wider range of cohesive devices.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

185 words

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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There is an increasing trend around the world of married couples deciding not to have children. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for couples who decide to do this.