You have recently purchased a piece of furniture, but you noticed a problem when it was delivered to you. Write a letter to the store manager and say what is the problem? how did it happen in your opinion? What do you suggest the manager should do to resolve the problem?
Dear Sir or Madam,
My name is Hitesh Dawar, I am writing to bring your attention to an issue that I recently purchased a wooden wardrobe, which was delivered to my house yesterday evening
and
I made Correct word choice
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this
purchase on December 1, 2023
under invoice number Add a comma
2023,
is
#2424
After the Unnecessary verb
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product
delivery, while
Correct word choice
and while
product
inspection, I found the wardrobe was damaged as there was a broken handle and it had lots of scratches on the body. I am extremely disappointed as I had a
high Correct article usage
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expectation
about the quality of Fix the agreement mistake
expectations
product
.
In my opinion, the issue arises Add an article
the product
a product
while
the transportationCorrect word choice
when
,
and the handling of the Remove the comma
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product
was
not done with proper care. Wrong verb form
are
Additionally
, the packaging was not done properly as the outer box was torned
and not covered properly.
Anyhow, I am a regular customer of your store and had never Correct your spelling
torn
turned
such
issues. I cannot use this
product
and strongly doubt about
the adequate quality of the Change preposition
apply
product
. I appreciate your prompt action on this
matter and replace the product
as soon as possible.
I look forward to a quick resolution.
Your
sincerely,
Hitesh DawarCorrect the word
Yours
Submitted by hiteshpaul on
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Task Achievement
Ensure that all aspects of the question are addressed thoroughly; although you provided an overview of the situation, specific details on how exactly it happened are missing.
Coherence and Cohesion
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite