You have recently purchased a piece of furniture, but you noticed a problem when it was delivered to you. Write a letter to the store manager and say what is the problem? how did it happen in your opinion? What do you suggest the manager should do to resolve the problem?

Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Hitesh Dawar, I am writing to bring your attention to an issue that I recently purchased a wooden wardrobe, which was delivered to my house yesterday evening
and
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I made
this
purchase on December 1,
2023
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under invoice number
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#2424 After the
product
delivery,
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and while
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product
inspection, I found the wardrobe was damaged as there was a broken handle and it had lots of scratches on the body. I am extremely disappointed as I had
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high
expectation
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about the quality of
product
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the product
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. In my opinion, the issue arises
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the transportation
,
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and the handling of the
product
was
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not done with proper care.
Additionally
, the packaging was not done properly as the outer box was
torned
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torn
turned
and not covered properly. Anyhow, I am a regular customer of your store and had never
such
issues. I cannot use
this
product
and strongly doubt
about
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the adequate quality of the
product
. I appreciate your prompt action on
this
matter and replace the
product
as soon as possible. I look forward to a quick resolution.
Your
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sincerely, Hitesh Dawar
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  • thirdly
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  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
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  • despite

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