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Some people think that language should be taught in small classes, while other people think the number of students in a language class does not matter. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #language #classes #students #class #matter
People have different views on whatever
class
 sizes
matters
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 for language courses.
While
 some
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 that large classes can allow
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the teacher
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teacher
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teachers
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 to focus more on providing quality content, I believe that teaching in small groups can cater to
individual
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 needs of each
student
. On one hand, when
teachers
 do not need to care about the number of
students
, they can focus more on improving
class
contents
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content
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.
Teachers
 can provide more general suggestions that can be applied to all kinds of
student
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students
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, or even conduct
class
 activities that are only possible in a large group of
students
.
For instance
,
teachers
 can organize in-
class
 debate competitions so
students
 can present their ideas with dozens of people, helping them to build
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 in a public speaking situation.
Teacher
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 can
also
 collect extensive data from the large sample of
students
, and adjust the teaching materials more effectively.
On the other hand
, I believe that teaching in small classes is better because
teachers
 can provide
personlized
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personalized
personalised
 content to each individual
students
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student
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according to
 their needs. When the course only consist
a
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handful of
student
, it is much easier for the
teacher
 to manage the
class
 and track the progress of each
student
.
For example
,
teachers
 can conduct one-to-one conversation practices with
students
, and point out specific problems from their performances. As each
student
 may encounter different difficulties
on
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 their language studies, it is my belief that
students
 can improve better if
personlized
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personalized
personalised
advices
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pieces of advice
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 can be given by the
teacher
. In conclusion,
although
teacher
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teachers
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 can focus more on the general course content in a large
class
, I think that it is more important to give
personlized advices
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personalised advice
 to each
student
according to
 their needs in a small
class
 environment.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tailored instruction
  • interactive learning
  • participation
  • peer interaction
  • diversity in perspectives
  • dynamic discussions
  • competitive atmosphere
  • individual attention
  • overwhelming
  • monitor progress
  • subjective
  • manageable class size
  • learning methodologies
  • collaborative environment
  • intimidating
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