Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organizations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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do
job
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their
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apply
decision
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decisions
overall
growth. Many people
think they spend all working
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their working
life
in the company
. While
others say it is good to change another
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to another
organisation
for work. I will discuss my views both positive and negative in upcoming paragraphas
. It is a logical conclusion
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paragraphs
initiate
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begin
People
do jobs related to their interest in the same company
for long
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a long
life
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time
Due to
this
, employee
think that it is secure to Fix the agreement mistake
employees
doing
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do
job
in Correct article usage
a job
same
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the same
company
they earn monthly
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a monthly
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a Better
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Apart
this
, Employees
don't hesitate to buy working
because they doing Replace the word
work
job
very long time so, they become more comfortable Add an article
the job
to do
work over there. Change the verb form
doing
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at
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working
without stress.
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work
Further
, others
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other
people
think it is better to distinct organisation
which helps to improve their lifestyle but, I think it is according to
person
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person's
for instance
,
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apply
employee
have Fix the agreement mistake
employees
taking
risk ability in their own Change the verb form
taken
life
then
people
will proceed to different organisations because it also
updated in the life
and competition with other experience
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experienced
employees
in the organisation
.
Moreover
, there are some drawback
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drawbacks
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changing
company
whilst
, it Correct word choice
apply
is take
time Change the verb form
takes
for
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to
buliding
relations with colleagues and Correct your spelling
build
also
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apply
employees
take time to understand the company
rules and regulations. By
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Because of
this
, people
face problems regarding competition with other experience
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experienced
employees
which stop
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stops
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them to
to achieve
promotion.
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from achieving
To conclude
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my prospective
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perspective
people
have taking risk ability in their life
then
he has great potential to
bigger position in their own Change preposition
for
life
. Whereas
who works with save and to do stable
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the stable
job
then
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will Change the capitalization
I
be recommend
to Change the verb form
be recommended
be recommending
same
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the same
organisation
for long life
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