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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

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The plans show a public
park
 when it first opened in 1920 and the same
park
 today. As it
shown
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showed
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 there
are
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is
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couple
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a couple
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 of
enterence
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entrance
,from Arnold Avenue and Eldon street.There
was
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 so many changes within no more
then
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 100 years.Almost everything had changed apart rose garden which is located at the top of
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the
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left
side
. In 1920 there was a fountain in the middle of Grange
park
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Park
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,which
is
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was
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 rebuilt
to
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into
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big
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a big
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 rose garden surrounded by seats.Everything was destroyed,on the right
side
 of
park
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the park
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.In the
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corner
cornor
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 there is a children's play area and a cafe nearby.Entering from
underground
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the underground
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 car
park
 of
eldon street
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Eldon Street
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 users can exit
to
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through to
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Water
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the Water
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 feature. Coming to
left
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the left
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side
 of
park
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the park
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,everything was removed
exept
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except
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a
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small garden of
rose
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roses
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 at the top.All seats
of
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on
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this
side
 were removed.
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 of
stage
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a stage
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fir
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for
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 musicians was built an Amphitheatre for concerts.
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structure
The essay lacks a logical structure with clear paragraphs and a logical sequence of information. Consider organizing the essay into introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion to enhance readability.
introduction/conclusion
The introduction and conclusion are not clearly defined or may be missing. These elements are essential in framing your essay and summarizing the main points discussed. You should construct a clear introductory statement and a concise conclusion.
supporting details
While some comparisons between the past and present park are made, the main points are not always supported with detail. Expand on the key differences with more descriptive information to support the main points you are discussing.
task completeness
The essay does not fully address the task as the changes are not described comprehensively. You should provide a more complete comparison of both plans with detailed descriptions of all the major elements in the park.
idea clarity
Ideas are presented, but they could be communicated more clearly. Pay attention to clarity and the logical presentation of information, so readers can easily follow the comparison between the two periods.
examples
Specific examples are present, but they lack the necessary detail to effectively illustrate the changes in the park. Use more precise language and detail to bring your examples to life.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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