The first graph below shows the weight (in tonnes ) of fruit produced by a farm during each month in 2013, and also the amount ( in tonnes ) of fertilizer used. The second graph shows the volume of rainfall in each month ( in millimeters.)

The first graph below shows the weight (in tonnes ) of fruit produced by a farm during each month in 2013, and also the amount ( in tonnes ) of fertilizer used. The second graph shows the volume of  rainfall in each month ( in millimeters.)
The line graph compares the quantity of fruit harvested and the sum of compost utilized during the 12 months of 2013 by farmland. The bar chart depicts the amount of rain in each month. It can be seen that the amount of products in
September
was at its peak. In February the quantity of rainfall dramatically increased.
According to
the line graph, with the rise of fertilizer from 0.5
tonnes
to about 0.75
tonnes
the number of products put up in 3 first months of the year, after that, the rate of compost dropped and over June and July the fruits didn't compost approximately, whilst the weight of produced fruit significantly increased to about 4.2
tonnes
in
September
. From the end of
September
until the end of the year, the figures for fruit diminished to its first weight
at
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about 2.2
tonnes
whereas
the farm received more fertilizer. Looking at the bar chart, in 2013, over February rained more than in other months at around 16
millimeters
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, and
this
proportion fell constantly until July, with just 4
millimeters
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of rainfall. the sum of the rain was stable from July to
September
and
then
it started to go up strikingly to 14
millimeters
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in December.
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