The first graph below shows the weight (in tonnes ) of fruit produced by a farm during each month in 2013, and also the amount ( in tonnes ) of fertilizer used. The second graph shows the volume of rainfall in each month ( in millimeters.)

The first graph below shows the weight (in tonnes ) of fruit produced by a farm during each month in 2013, and also the amount ( in tonnes ) of fertilizer used. The second graph shows the volume of rainfall in each month ( in millimeters.)
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The line graph compares the quantity of fruit harvested and the sum of compost utilized during the 12 months of 2013 by farmland. The bar chart depicts the amount of rain in each month. It can be seen that the amount of products in
September
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was at its peak. In February the quantity of rainfall dramatically increased.
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the line graph, with the rise of fertilizer from 0.5
tonnes
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to about 0.75
tonnes
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the number of products put up in 3 first months of the year, after that, the rate of compost dropped and over June and July the fruits didn't compost approximately, whilst the weight of produced fruit significantly increased to about 4.2
tonnes
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in
September
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. From the end of
September
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until the end of the year, the figures for fruit diminished to its first weight
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about 2.2
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whereas
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the farm received more fertilizer. Looking at the bar chart, in 2013, over February rained more than in other months at around 16
millimeters
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, and
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proportion fell constantly until July, with just 4
millimeters
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of rainfall. the sum of the rain was stable from July to
September
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and
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it started to go up strikingly to 14
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in December.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words september, tonnes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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