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The graph below shows the contribution to different sectors of Indian economy in 1950,1970 and 1990

The graph below shows the contribution to different sectors of Indian economy in 1950,1970 and 1990
The bar graph illustrates the number of main sectors in which
India
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's gross domestic product was contributed from 1960 to 2000. The data has been calibrated in terms of percentage.
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, it is clearly seen that the highest proportion of
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 was invested by
India
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 in agriculture
as well as
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 in the service
sector
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 as compared with the industry area.
According to
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 the given data, it is clearly seen that the largest percentile of
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 was spent on the agriculture
sector
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 in 1960 and in 1970,
while
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 in 1990 it was Nearly 31%.
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, in 1960 almost 17% and 18% of
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's
GDP
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 was contributed to two main sectors
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 as industrial and services respectively.
Apart from
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, an increment of 15 per cent has been showing between the years of 1980 and 1990, the spending of
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 in the service
sector
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. Moving
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, in 2000 the least amount was spent on the agriculture
sector
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 12%.
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, in the industrial
sector
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 contribution of
India
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's
GDP
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 was 23.
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, the services
sector
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 reached its top post position at
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.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words india, gdp, sector with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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