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The map below shows the changes that have taken place at the waterfront area of a town called Darwin between 2009 and 2014.

The map below shows the changes that have taken place at the waterfront area of a town called Darwin between 2009 and 2014.
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the given map depicts information about changes which took place
at
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darwin town
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Darwin Town
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 near
to
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the
wtaerfront
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waterfront
area
 over
period
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a period
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 of five years from 2009 to 2014 after analysis, most of the changes can be seen away from the central
area
firstly
, the
large
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 industrial
area
 between
road
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the road
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 and
sea
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the sea
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were
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was
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 established there but it was replaced by trees in
majority
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the majority
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 making the footpath to the labour building and
limit
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limiting
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 the
area
 toward
sea
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the sea
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in addition
, there were not
many
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 residential building for
living
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a living
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however
, three more building were constructed
along side
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alongside
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 with university building for resident getting higher education
furthermore
, coming toward the circling
area
 the swimming pool
overtaken
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overtook
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 the place of industrial
area
 near to
lake
 after that, the school and convention center remained the same
additionally
 the
lake
 and two swimming
pool
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pools
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 adjacent to
fishing
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the fishing
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area
also
 remained untouched throughout the period
overall
, it is vividly manifested that
a
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apply
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tremendous changes can be seen outside the
lake
area
moreover
, constructing
swimming
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a swimming
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 pool near to
lake
give
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gives
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good
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a good
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 view and
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peace
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piece
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peace
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 of mind
for
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to
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 people
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, lake with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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