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The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. You may spend 20 minutes to complete the task

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The bar chart shows a comparison of five different expenditure areas in
France
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 and the
UK
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 in 2010.
Overall
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, it was recorded that both these nations spent the most money on
cars
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,
whereas
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, the most significant expenditure gap was apparent in cameras. Relatively more money was spent by the
UK
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 on
cars
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, books, and cameras than in
France
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.
The
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 first category which is
cars
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, the
UK
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 spent just over 450,000
pounds
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,
by contrast
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,
France
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 used about 55,000
pounds
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 less. For books, the expenditure gap was widened, but countries expended less than they did on
cars
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: approximately 400,000 and 300,000
pounds
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 for the
UK
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 and
France
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, respectively. The margin in spending was the largest for cameras, with the figures for
France
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 being more than twice smaller (150,000
pounds
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) than that for the
UK
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 (slightly over 35,000
pounds
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).
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,
France
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's
expense
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 on
computer
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computers
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 and perfume was higher than the
UK
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's. About 380,000
pounds
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 was spent by
France
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 on computers as opposed to 350,000
pounds
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 by the
UK
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, but the amounts for perfume were a lot lower with the respective
number
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numbers
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 of 200,000 and just under 150,000
pounds
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.

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