The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. Write at least 150 words. You may spend 20 minutes to complete the task

The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.

Write at least 150 words. You may spend 20 minutes to complete the task
The bar chart shows a comparison of five different expenditure areas in
France
and the
UK
in 2010.
Overall
, it was recorded that both these nations spent the most money on
cars
,
whereas
, the most significant expenditure gap was apparent in cameras. Relatively more money was spent by the
UK
on
cars
, books, and cameras than in
France
.
The
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In the
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first category which is
cars
, the
UK
spent just over 450,000
pounds
,
by contrast
,
France
used about 55,000
pounds
less. For books, the expenditure gap was widened, but countries expended less than they did on
cars
: approximately 400,000 and 300,000
pounds
for the
UK
and
France
, respectively. The margin in spending was the largest for cameras, with the figures for
France
being more than twice smaller (150,000
pounds
) than that for the
UK
(slightly over 35,000
pounds
).
However
,
France
's
expense
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expenditure
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on
computer
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computers
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and perfume was higher than the
UK
's. About 380,000
pounds
was spent by
France
on computers as opposed to 350,000
pounds
by the
UK
, but the amounts for perfume were a lot lower with the respective
number
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numbers
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of 200,000 and just under 150,000
pounds
.
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