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The pie charts below give data on the spending and consumption of resources by countries of the world and how the population is distributed.

The pie charts below give data on the spending and consumption of resources by countries of the world and how the population is distributed.
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The presented pie charts illustrate how countries around the allocation of
world
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 spending and consumption of
resources
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 and the distribution of
world
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 population.
Overall
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, people around the
world
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, which are mostly concentrated in Asian countries, spend most of their
resources
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 on food.
In addition
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 to that,
USA
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the USA
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 and Europe account for the biggest proportion
on
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of
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 the consumption of
resources
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. The data shows that almost a quarter of people's spending goes to food consumption. Around 18% is dedicated to
cover
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covering
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 the transport cost
while
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 12% of the
resources
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 is used to pay bills related to housing. Only a tiny fraction of the
resources
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 is allocated for clothing. Meanwhile, the remaining 40% is utilized for other purposes. Despite only making up 28% of the total
world
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 population, people in Europe and America consume 60% of the
resources
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.
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, the rest of
population
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the population
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 living in other continents merely makes use of 40% of the
resources
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.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words world, resources with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie charts
  • data
  • spending habits
  • consumption
  • resources
  • population distribution
  • comparison
  • patterns
  • developed countries
  • developing countries
  • implications
  • disparities
  • environmental consequences
  • social impacts
  • sustainability
  • economic development
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