The Chart shows the number of visitors to a local cinema according to age in 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The Chart shows the number of visitors to a local cinema according to age in 2000.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart illustrates the
quantity
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number
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of individuals who visited a
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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cinema categorized by age in the year 2000.
Overall
, it seems that the number of people who went to the cinema tended to decrease steadily
according to
age from 10 to 45, and increased dramatically from 55 onwards. The visitors’ group of
ages
31-45 were very low,
while
the
ages
55 and older were significant. Speaking of the age 10 - 45, the proportion of individuals demerited noticeably. Children were interested more than adults, the
ages
10-15 comprised highest with 21 per cent. The group of
ages
from 16 to 45 tended not to go to the cinema frequently so the percentage dropped sharply, only 5 per cent of
ages
31-45. Regarding old people (
ages
55 and older), they went to movie
theatre
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theatres
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more than young people. The chart showed the old covered over a half (51 per cent). It seems that they were fascinated and
therefore
the proportion of them
were
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was
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outstanding
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more outstanding
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than other groups.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ages with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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