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Band 6.5

Your next door neighbour owns a small dog that barks throughout the day and the night. Write a letter to your neighbour requesting that something be done about the dog. Include in your letter: Your reason for writing What you would like to happen A nice, respectful style.

#door #neighbour #dog #night #reason #style
Dear Smith, Hope you and your family are doing great. I know you have a small cute dog that you love so much, but I am writing to you to bring your attention that we can hear his bark during the day.
Although
 the common wall is sound insulation, unfortunately, his park can be heard throughout the day which disturbs our conform. It would be great if you tried to train him to stop barking. I know it is not easy, but I searched on the Internet and I found that some animal trainers are able to help you. I would be happy to help you, so if you want, I can send you the phone numbers of some trainers which I found. I hope that my request doesn’t cause you any inconvenience and you can solve
this
 problem soon.Say hello to your family. Yours faithfully Marzi
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Logical Structure
Ensure to structure the letter so that paragraphs flow logically, each with a clear main idea. The transition between requesting action and offering assistance could be smoother.
Single Idea Per Paragraph
Adequate use of paragraphs is evident, but you can enhance coherence by connecting ideas more clearly, possibly through better linking words or phrases.
Greeting and Closing
While your greeting and closing are in a generally respectful style, the body of the letter would benefit from a warm opening sentence and a more personal closing remark that reinforces the respectful tone.
Complete Response
Your letter addresses the task and suggests a suitable solution, but try to fully develop your ideas by providing specific details about your experiences with the dog barking and how it affects your daily life.
Suitable Writing Tone
Your tone is polite and respectful which is suitable for the context. However, consider using a wider range of sentence structures and vocabulary to enhance the formality and effectiveness of your writing.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • disrupted
  • challenging
  • appreciate
  • solutions
  • training
  • anti-bark collars
  • excessive barking
  • resources
  • well-being
  • distress
  • amicably
  • cooperation
  • concern
  • neighbourly relations
  • understanding
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