Social media badly impact our relationships. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Over the
last
two or three decades, technology helps
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has helped
people
's live
to Replace the word
lives
easier
than ever before in many ways. Add a missing verb
be easier
However
, some claim that social media
affects the population's relationship
at present. I agree that social media
affects socializing with others along with
lack
of affection between the Correct article usage
a lack
realtionship
. Correct your spelling
relationships
This
essay will discuss it briefly for the following reasons.
To begin
with, people
do not like to interact with their closed
relatives Replace the word
close
by
directly Change preposition
apply
instead
of talking with
social platforms because they have more Change preposition
on
interest
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interested
to use
social Change preposition
in using
medias
in order to Correct your spelling
media
get
enormous Verb problem
make
friends
, not only locals but also
foreigners, as a result
, socializing to
others Change preposition
with
is existed
. Change to the active voice
exists
has existed
This
social platforms give more and more Change the determiner
These
entertainments
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entertainment
as
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apply
comapred
to Correct your spelling
compared
the
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apply
relationship
like likes and comments to
around the world, Change preposition
apply
therefore
, people
like to get more comments from unknown
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an unknown
person
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people
besides
their realtives
or loved ones. Correct your spelling
relatives
For example
, the youth generation do
not talk to their Change the verb form
does
realtives
when they come to their house Correct your spelling
relatives
while
they cannot out and say hello to them because they do not have Correct word choice
and
interest
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the interest
to talk
directly rather than virtually. So, Change preposition
in talking
socisl
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social
medias
always impact public Correct your spelling
media
relationship
undoubtedly.
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relationships
Furthermore
, mankind cannot express their love between
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in
relationship
because their focus Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
only
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is only
to get
more Change preposition
on getting
friends
in
social Change preposition
on
medias
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media
to
around the world. Mankind Change preposition
apply
always
ready to give and receive love from Add a missing verb
is always
unknown
person Add an article
an unknown
besides
their relatives which means they can find friends
who has
similar thoughts and ideas from social Change the verb form
have
media
but this
is impossible to expect between
Change preposition
in
relationship
. For instance
, Indian
young generation Correct article usage
the Indian
have
more Change the verb form
has
friends
in
Facebook but most Change preposition
on
friends
belongs
to other nations. So, social Change the verb form
belong
media
affects people
's realtinship
negatively.
In conclusion, social Correct your spelling
relationship
relationships
media
affects socializing with others and lack of affetcion
between loved ones Correct your spelling
interaction
are
the crucial adverse impact Correct subject-verb agreement
is
of
the Change preposition
on
realtionship
. I strongly agree with Correct your spelling
relationship
this
statement in the above-mentioned details. I hope this
situation should alter that people
should adhere Change preposition
to relationship
relationship
Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
by
directly.Change preposition
apply
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