Social media badly impact our relationships. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Over the
last
two or three decades, technology
helps
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people
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live
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to
easier
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than ever before in many ways.
However
, some claim that social
media
affects the population's
relationship
at present. I agree that social
media
affects socializing with others
along with
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a lack
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of affection between the
realtionship
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relationships
.
This
essay will discuss it briefly for the following reasons.
To begin
with,
people
do not like to interact with their
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relatives
by
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directly
instead
of talking
with
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social platforms because they have more
interest
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to use
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in using
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social
medias
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media
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in order to
get
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enormous
friends
, not only locals but
also
foreigners,
as a result
, socializing
to
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with
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others
is existed
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.
This
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social platforms give more and more
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as
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comapred
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compared
to
the
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relationship
like likes and comments
to
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around the world,
therefore
,
people
like to get more comments from
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an unknown
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person
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people
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besides
their
realtives
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relatives
or loved ones.
For example
, the youth generation
do
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not talk to their
realtives
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relatives
when they come to their house
while
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and
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they cannot out and say hello to them because they do not have
interest
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the interest
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to talk
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in talking
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directly rather than virtually. So,
socisl
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social
medias
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media
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always impact public
relationship
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relationships
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undoubtedly.
Furthermore
, mankind cannot express their love
between
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relationship
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relationships
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because their focus
only
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is only
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to get
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on getting
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more
friends
in
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on
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social
medias
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media
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to
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around the world. Mankind
always
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ready to give and receive love from
unknown
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an unknown
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person
besides
their relatives which means they can find
friends
who
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similar thoughts and ideas from social
media
but
this
is impossible to expect
between
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in
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relationship
.
For instance
,
Indian
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the Indian
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young generation
have
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more
friends
in
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on
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Facebook but most
friends
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to other nations. So, social
media
affects
people
's
realtinship
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relationship
relationships
negatively. In conclusion, social
media
affects socializing with others and lack of
affetcion
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interaction
between loved ones
are
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is
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the crucial adverse impact
of
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the
realtionship
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relationship
. I strongly agree with
this
statement in the above-mentioned details. I hope
this
situation should alter that
people
should adhere
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to relationship
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relationship
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relationships
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by
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apply
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directly.
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