the graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in the cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

the graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in the cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
The given line graph illustrates the proportion of people staying in the cities in the
Philippines
, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia between 1970 and 2020 and the projections until 2040.
Overall
, all four nations had
higher
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proportion of those living in the
city
in 2020 compared to
in
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1970 and the trends are projected to remain consistent until the end of
period
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the period
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. There was only 30% of
Malaysian
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who
lives
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not in the suburban areas. The figure consistently increased and became more than double its initial value by 2020.
Moreover
, it is predicted that the proportion will keep on growing and peaking by the end of
period
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with over 80% of
population
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the population
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living in the
city
. A similar trend was observed from Indonesia’s
population
which
initially
fewer than 20% and gradually rose to over thrice its starting value in the year 2020.
Furthermore
, the number of Indonesians in the
city
surpassed those of Thailand and the
Philippines
in 2000 and 2010 respectively.
Additionally
, there were only about 19% and 32%
population
of Thailand and the
Philippines
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in the cities. Despite their
fluctuated
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patterns, they grew by over 10% in 2020. By the end of
period
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, half of
Thai
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the Thai
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population
is predicted to live in the
city
,
whereas
only around 40% of the
Philippines
will stay in the suburb.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words philippines, city, population with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • Asian countries
  • living in cities
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • introduction
  • overview
  • trend
  • body paragraph
  • compare
  • predicted percentages
  • summarize
  • closing statement
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