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The graph below shows the percentage of mobile phone owners using various mobile phone features in Vietnam in the year 2005, 2008, 2010.

The graph below shows the percentage of mobile phone owners using various mobile phone features in Vietnam in the year 2005, 2008, 2010.
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The table compares the proportion of the usage of the owners of mobile in five years, from 2005 to 2010 in Vietnam.
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, the total usage of phones mostly increased after 5 years, except for the figures for the transmission of messages and the audio recordings. Vietnam's people use the highest percentage of phones in making calls and taking pictures. In 2005, the make calls
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 of the phone was 100, followed by 65, 82 and 78 in the take photos , the text messages and the audio recordings
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 respectively. The lowest figure was recorded in the photography sector.After 5 years, the photo-taking
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 climbed by 65 to 77.
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, the usage of mobile remains the same in 2008. Regarding the data for 2010, though the calling
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 use decreased slightly, it still remains the most important
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 in Vietnam's mobile.
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, the rate of changes on mobile features in taking photos and texting increased slightly, but the opposite was true for calling and recording features whose figures decreased by about 5 to 10 over the period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words feature with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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