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The line graph illustrates three different kinds of crimes that occurred in Newport City center between 2003 and 2012.

The line graph illustrates three different kinds of crimes that occurred in Newport City center between 2003 and 2012.
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The graph illustrates the crimes that happened in Newport City centre from 2003 to 2012.
Overall
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, it can be seen that burglary and car theft have decreased from the beginning in 2003,
while
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 robbery or shoplifting from a person has a fluctuating number of incidents in 9 years.
To begin
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 with, it can be seen that burglary had about 3400 cases in 2003 and dramatically fell from 2004 to 2008 with its peak of 3700 scenes in 2004. For the remaining years, it showed an unexpected amount until the end of the period.
Furthermore
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, car theft started with 2700 numbers and fluctuated in the next periods with a total of 2400 incidents by the end of the period.
In contrast
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, robbery or crime from a person has a marginal amount of action during the reporting period. We can conclude that either burglary or car extortion has significantly gone down over the years,
on the other hand
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, robbery or piracy from a person has remained the same.

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