The diagram shows the life cycle of a monarch butterfly.

The diagram shows the life cycle of a monarch butterfly.
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The diagram gives detailed information about the process by which a common butterfly goes through its entire lifecycle.
Overall
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, the lifecycle of the common butterfly lasts about
over
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three months and has seven main stages, from an egg to the development of the mature butterfly. Looking at the details, the lifecycle begins when the eggs are laid by
adult
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an adult
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female butterfly on a plant.It is followed by the development
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of
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an embryo during two to three weeks.( Each egg involves only one embryo).After emerging from the embryo as a
ceterpillar
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caterpillar
,it keeps on growing in size step by step during a two-month period.At the final stage of the shedding , the caterpillar transforms into a pupa within just two hours. In the following step, it is noteworthy to mention that
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tiny creature undergoes the process of a metamorphosis ,which turns
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it
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into a butterfly, and
this
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happens between two weeks.
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, the adult butterfly
reach
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reaches
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its maturity
in
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at
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this
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point , but Surprisingly it does not grow in size during the metamorphosis.
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