In many countries there has been an increase in social problems involving teenagers in recent years. Many people believe that this is due to modern lifestyles because parents spend more and more time at work and have less time to supervise their children. To what extent do you believe this is true?
Recently, social issues among the youngest have increased in some nations.
According to
some, this
is mainly because of the new lifestyle as a result
parents
spend more time at work and have less time to take care of their children
. In my opinion, I totally agree with the statement because parents
are the only ones responsible for their children
and also
teenagers can be affected easily by people
around them.
Firstly
, parents
are the closest people
to their children
and they are responsible for them. In other words
, nobody denies that children
need people
to guide them in the right way, and this
can be done by their parents
. For example
, children
of their age have to apply to school, and they need someone who can choose the best school which provides high-quality teaching. Therefore
, children
will face many problems if their parents
are careless in front of them.
Another point is that teenagers are influenced by the environment around them. To put it simply, the youngest are not measured enough so it is easy to tempt them to the wrong way. For instance
, many bad people
exploit children
to do bad things such
as selling drugs, and children
do not know that it is a bad job. Hence
, when parents
are not supervising their children
and taking care of them by knowing their children
's friends and making sure they are good friends, they will lose their children
and can not return them back.
To sum up
, I agree that parents
are the only ones responsible for their children
and without them, children
would be tempted to the wrong way by some unknown individuals. If parents
did not take care of their children
, there would be dire consequences.Submitted by asomm5563 on
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