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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first graph displays the percentages of
households
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 in one country that owned electrical appliances between 1920 and 2019,
while
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 the second graph
illutrates
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illustrates
 how much
time
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 the average household in that country spent doing housework every week during the same period.
Overall
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, ownership of all three appliances increased during
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 period, with that of refrigerators having the greatest growth. At the same
time
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, the amount of
time
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 spent on housework decreased. Washing machines were the most common of the three electrical appliances in 1920, with
owneship
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ownership
reachicng
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reaching
 40% of
households
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.
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 had risen to about 75% by 2019, with a small dip in 1980. Nearly a third of
households
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 owned vacuum cleaners in 1920.
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 ownership climbed steadily, it did not reach 100% until 2000. In comparison, almost no
households
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 had a refrigerator in 1920.
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, ownership increased rapidly and by 1980 there was one in every household. The amount of
time
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 spent doing housework, in
contrats
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contrast
, first fell significantly from 50 to 15 hours per week per household between 1920 and 1980. After that, it experienced only a small dip to just over 10 hours a week in 2019
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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dip" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership of electrical appliances
  • steadily increased
  • dramatically decreased
  • correlating the rise
  • became common
  • households
  • prevalence
  • technological advancements
  • increased affordability
  • household chores
  • labor-saving devices
  • allocated for housework
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