There is a problem in your street. Write a letter to the local town council explaining who you are, what the problem is and what you hope will be done about it.

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Dear John, I hope your health and work are fine. I was very happy that you invited me to your country's festival. I decided to accept your offer and I visit

this

festival. Because I love Christmas day.I am writing in order to thank you for bringing me to your attention. Today is the 15th of December, and festival dates are the 30th of December and the 1st of January.

This

day was the Christmas holidays. So I will purchase a ticket for the pilot on 28th December.

In addition

, I will do housework and tasks till I have left for your country. Actually, I will be honest. Nowadays, all of the residents love the holiday and are active. And I want to be active in

this

festival.

For instance

, go out stay at home and make snowmen from snow. I love walking around streets during the Christmas holidays because there are a lot of people, adults and teenagers, and snow covers the surroundings and around will be lily-white. Yours sincerely, Rayimkulov.

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task achievement

The letter fails to address the set task, which is to write to the local town council about a problem in your street. It rather discusses an acceptance of a festival invitation, which is off-topic.

coherence cohesion

The structure of the letter is confusing with no clear introduction, body, or conclusion that are relevant to the given task. The paragraphs are not well-developed and the ideas are not connected to the specified purpose of writing about a street problem.

coherence cohesion

The closing of the letter is inappropriate for the context of a formal letter to the town council and is more suitable for an informal letter to a friend.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

6 paragraphs

172 words

6.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

Local council, town hall, representative, official address
Infrastructure, amenities, public services
Road maintenance, potholes, resurfacing
Streetlight, illumination, lighting outage
Noise pollution, disturbance, decibel levels
Health hazards, safety concerns, risk assessment
Remedial action, corrective measures, enforcement
Communication, response, follow-up
Pertinent, urgent, pressing issue
Resolution, rectification, amelioration

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

pie chart and table about fish imported and source in the US

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