The diagram below shows how honey is made in small-scale commercial production. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given diagram illustrates the process of
honey
production on a small scale in order to sell it in the market. Overall
it can be seen that there are two main phases involved in this
process, the first phase belongs to bees and the second one belongs to humans.
The first phase starts when the honey
bee tries to gather nectar on
the flower. Change preposition
from
Next,
depositing honey
is conducted by these insects. When the honey
has been dried by fan wings, the cells are kept clean of any infection and dirt.
The human phase commands when humans seal cells with special equipment and clothes like wax. In what follows, the honeycombs are collected and pressed to pouring it
into a basket or other practical containers. Wrong verb form
pour
Subsequently
, honey
is poured into a sump tank which has a 45 to 50c temperature. In the following stage, honey
is placed in selection
tank for almost 4 days, after which it is put into jars. Correct article usage
a selection
Finally
, honey
is delivered to the market to be consumed by citizens.Submitted by sr.alizadeh9191 on
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words honey with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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