空気を読むという言葉がありますが、日本には場の雰囲気を読み取って周囲に合わせて行動することを求める風潮があります。それでは、敢えて周囲に合わせて行動しない方が良いとあなたが思うのはどんな場面ですか。またそれはなぜですか？具体例を挙げながら70字程度の英語で説明しなさい。

If you know what you want to do, there is no need to follow the path

that is

considered stable in Japan.

Although

Japan is a developed country, it lags behind in terms of diversity.

For example

, in today's Japan, a high level of education is considered a good thing, and there is a strong tendency to look down on and exclude people who do not fall into

this

category.

However

, if you look around the world, you will see people who are active and successful in various fields, and you will realize how narrow-minded many Japanese people are.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

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Relevant & specific examples

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bilingual
multilingual
fluency
communicate
cognitive skills
cultural awareness
opportunities
globalized world
job market
interact
linguistic abilities
cultural exchange
language proficiency
language barrier
foreign travel
personal growth
academic achievement
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